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by scarab , Monday, July 27, 2015, 15:22 (3417 days ago) @ Cody Miller

The title is: Why Bungie gets visual storytelling wrong

I emphasized the why because the title, to me, suggests that this would be the focus of your post.

Your title doesn't even mention text or books so why even mention them in your post? I could see the point if your thesis was that Bungie spent so much energy on text that they hadn't the energy to do any visual story telling. But I don't think that's what you were saying.

If you cut out the, "visual story telling is superior" stuff then I suspect that your post would be half as long and would have more punch and focus as a consequence. You would also have the benefit that people would address the "Bungie gets visual storytelling wrong" stuff rather than addressing the, "visual story telling is superior" stuff (it's just a distraction).

You let yourself get side tracked by your obsession.

Could we have a tl;dr version that only addresses Bungie's visual story telling weaknesses? Post it in a new thread.